Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many are of the opinion that raising the

age

at which people can get driving licenses is the best way to make

roads

safer.

Although

this

will help prevent some

accidents

due to

inexperience, I strongly feel that it is more important to focus on safer

roads

through improved urban planning. The main justification that proponents of raising the

age

at which people can drive will often cite

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the number of

accidents

attributed to inexperience. In the USA, most teenagers get their driving

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around

age

16. There are a couple of factors that can lead

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to cause

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accidents

than someone in their 20s. The first is that they simply do

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have as much road experience. They have only dealt with a limited number of experiences and are more likely to make poor decisions at pivotal moments. The other

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reason is that many American teenagers begin drinking alcohol around

this

age

even though the legal

age

is 21. Teenagers are notoriously irresponsible and they have not developed strategies for handling alcohol when driving. All people, when drunk, are dangerous but it is especially dangerous if they are inexperienced in terms of both alcohol and driving. Even though these are valid points, I do not think they outweigh the number of

accidents

that poor urban planning and infrastructure cause. There will always be other causes that include young drivers, driving

while

under the influence and road rage but the only factor that plays a hand in nearly all

accidents

relates to how the

roads

have been planned. Take the city of New Orleans

for example

. The urban planners in New Orleans constructed the

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city with almost entirely one-way streets.

This

may make it inconvenient at times but it has

also

resulted in one of the lowest accident rates in the USA. It has

also

allowed for the construction of parallel streetcars that have

also

greatly reduced the total calamity. Cities around the world have replicated

this

approach by increasing the total one-way streets and working streetcars into the city plan and

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reciprocal declines in vehicular

accidents

. I believe that urban planning, despite not being a well-publicized cause, is the main source of most casualties around the world and raising the legal driving

age

would have little real impact. The more cities that begin to focus their attention on the causes, rather than the symptoms, of a mishap the safer our

roads

will be for ourselves and future generations.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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