Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many are of the opinion that raising the

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at which people can get driving licenses is the best way to make

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safer.

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will help prevent some

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due to

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inexperience, I strongly feel that it is more important to focus on safer

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through improved urban planning. The main justification that proponents of raising the

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at which people can drive will often cite

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the number of

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attributed to inexperience. In the USA, most teenagers get their driving

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around

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16. There are a couple of factors that can lead

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to cause

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accidents

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than someone in their 20s. The first is that they simply do

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have as much road experience. They have only dealt with a limited number of experiences and are more likely to make poor decisions at pivotal moments. The other

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reason is that many American teenagers begin drinking alcohol around

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even though the legal

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is 21. Teenagers are notoriously irresponsible and they have not developed strategies for handling alcohol when driving. All people, when drunk, are dangerous but it is especially dangerous if they are inexperienced in terms of both alcohol and driving. Even though these are valid points, I do not think they outweigh the number of

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that poor urban planning and infrastructure cause. There will always be other causes that include young drivers, driving

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under the influence and road rage but the only factor that plays a hand in nearly all

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relates to how the

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have been planned. Take the city of New Orleans

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. The urban planners in New Orleans constructed the

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city with almost entirely one-way streets.

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may make it inconvenient at times but it has

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resulted in one of the lowest accident rates in the USA. It has

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allowed for the construction of parallel streetcars that have

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greatly reduced the total calamity. Cities around the world have replicated

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approach by increasing the total one-way streets and working streetcars into the city plan and

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reciprocal declines in vehicular

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. I believe that urban planning, despite not being a well-publicized cause, is the main source of most casualties around the world and raising the legal driving

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would have little real impact. The more cities that begin to focus their attention on the causes, rather than the symptoms, of a mishap the safer our

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will be for ourselves and future generations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

416 words

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