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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#schools #force #children #language
The world is becoming more and more modern but some people still think that
children
 should not be forced to learn a foreign
language
. I entirely disagree with
this
 view. There are some reasons why
children
 should learn a foreign
language
.
Firstly
, many companies
has
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 now required a degree
of
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 English or Chinese or Japanese and so on. So if
children
 do not learn a foreign
language
, they may have trouble in the future.
Secondly
, our country is visited by many foreigners.
Therefore
,
children
 should learn a foreign
language
such
 as English or Chinese to understand what the visitors say when they ask them something. Learning a foreign
language
 brings many benefits
for
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children
.
First
 of all, if
children
 have learnt a foreign
language
 since they were at school, they can find a job easily when they grow up.
Moreover
,
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children
 who want to study abroad, it is a great idea to learn
foreign
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language
.
Last
 but not least, if
children
 know a foreign
language
, they can communicate with foreign visitors and get more information as well as knowledge about other countries
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 the world. In conclusion, learning a foreign
language
 is very important for
children
 and I do not agree with the viewpoint that schools had not better force
children
 to learn the
language
 of another country.
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