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Some people claim that public transport should be free of charge and others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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No doubt, Public transport has its own significance in a nation. There are predominantly two contrasting views where a school of people believes that common people’s transport should be without fares while others have contrasting views. I would like to delve
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 both views before forming a specific view. Apparently, various factors make a section of people advocate that conveyances for commoners must be exempted as it will be very serviceable from
environmental
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perspective
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prospective
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. Momentarily,
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 of citizens owned their
transit
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facility
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such
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 as cars and bikes. More
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private vehicles will be used; more pollutants will be released
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atmosphere
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 due to which
carbon
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level
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 in
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 will be
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 and it is a crucial cause of damaging air
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. To corroborate, as per Pollution Control Board, Delhi, a city of Asian countries records
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elevated air pollution due to enormous numbers of car users in
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 metro city.
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 liberated
transit
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 system should be delivered.
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Nevertheless
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 some
believes
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 that
transit
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 should have some specific fare. In order to cumbersome transport expenditures
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 as paying remuneration to drivers, fuel and maintenance expenses, an amount must be charged.
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Additionally
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 it will
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 help to reduce misuse of common people’s conveyance system.
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 plethora of
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 should be imposed on transportation. To recapitulate,
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transit
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the transit
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 system of society should be let off the hook in
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society yet it must be imposed with certain funds.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • accessibility
  • social equity
  • overcrowding
  • operational costs
  • fiscal burden
  • subsidies
  • public health
  • congestion
  • urban planning
  • revenue
  • taxpayers
  • mobility
  • psychological effects
  • quality of service
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