In some countries people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development

As the world is rapidly developing towards new job markets,
people
have to spend more
time
with their
work
, and most employers name it as working overtime.
However
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this
is happening because of two main reasons, poor self-management and
people
having to compete with the new trends. I believe
this
is a negative development and the following essay will
further
elaborate. To commence with, today employers and employees have
work
to do,
which
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that
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they cannot complete within the given
time
frame, which means there are not enough hours in the working days to complete the
work
. As a ,result most
people
work
on weekends as well without getting paid or not. To elaborate,
people
get into making sicknesses
such
as diabetes, high obesity and pressure, which will harm their bodies in the
next
few years. To exemplify, one of my friends had to
work
on a project but due to poor self-management she could not finish, so she had to stay back nights and weekends. Even though the project was completed successfully, she was suffering from minor health issues. So workers, need to manage their
time
effectively and spending long hours at
work
will provide them nothing but a cost of living.
In contrast
, today humans follow social media trends, influencers and other factors. To compete with
people
and show off their power, and
luxrious
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luxurious
lifestyles
people
work
hard day and night as well.
As a result
of self-satisfaction for the short
time
,
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they eventually lose the bond with their family members and
this
leads to
a family issues
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family issues
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. As an example, a person who is successful in a business and leads a wealthy life
,
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has some sort of family problems which we cannot see.
Subsequently
, working longer hours will bring
people
negative factors to life. To conclude, I believe that working overtime is a negative development for
people
's life because
this
will cause death-related diseases for
people
as well as they will not be able to manage
family
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their family
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and
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • economic pressures
  • financial stability
  • competitive job markets
  • corporate cultures
  • stigma
  • demonstrate dedication
  • advent of technology
  • blurred the lines
  • accelerated career progression
  • dedicated employee
  • significant negative implications
  • stress levels
  • mental health
  • physical health
  • social and family time
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
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