some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world,subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays
people
have strived to find which lesson
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important than others. There is much debate over whether
history
or
science
and
technology
are the most significant
among
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the
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school subjects.
Although
history
is
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crucial and limited source that we can profit from, I still think that
science
and
technology
is
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beneficial to develop humanity. Some
people
highlight that there is no subject in terms of importance other than
history
since they think it is the primary source
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we can utilize from.
For example
, COVİD-19 which is an epidemic disease emerged in the
world
two years ago. Many experts investigated the previous epidemics for what we need to do.
In addition
, some countries develop new policies to improve their future and they try to do not the same mistakes
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they did in the past.
However
, we need to keep
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modern
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age.
Therefore
,
history
cannot be
an
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only data for
present
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.
Science
and
technology
are more beneficial to develop humanity in today’s
world
. Every single day
world
is changing, and
people
cannot solve the problems
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traditional ways.
For example
, there is a big problem, which is global warming, which
people
have been facing currently.
History
cannot help to overcome
this
condition, yet
science
and
technology
can deal with
this
situation.
Hence
, the
world
is altering more rapidly
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compered
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compared
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to past decades so old ways are not adequate for solving problems. In conclusion,
history
is one of the most significant
subject
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to profit from, in today’s
world
people
benefit from
science
and
technology
more to develop humanity.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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