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I think that for some people subjects arts, music and drama are more important, therefore they want to pay attention only to that, and some people disagree with this opinion. In this essay, I want to discuss and explain my point of view.

#people #subjects #arts #music #drama #attention #point
Firstly
, I think that if a person is good
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 art or music than
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 other subjects,
then
 she has
chance
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 to make up a good career.
For instance
,
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 have a sister who did not want to teach
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academic subjects but was better at drawing.
However
, she may not be able to do well in school exams, but she was very good at drawing and had enough
skill
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 in drawing.
Therefore
, she decided to enter the University where she taught art and want to open her
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popular gallery.
As a result
, my sister may
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bot
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 be an engineer or something, but she may
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do her job better and
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may be
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this
 job will bring her
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success
succes
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success
 in later life. To some
extent
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 these interests help people to self-knowledge.
In other words
,
engaged
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 in streams, like dance
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and
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and
 music bring out the hidden talents in a person.
For example
, dancing in some forms
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 to develop a healthy mindset and can be given
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different sounds and
rhytms
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rhythms
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Consequently
, that self-knowledge helps them reduce their aggressive nature. In conclusion,
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 guess that everyone can individually go to circles and develop there. For
this
 one does not need to offer a lot of time for art or music, since
this
 is a
person
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 sympathy for
this
 subject.
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