I think that for some people subjects arts, music and drama are more important, therefore they want to pay attention only to that, and some people disagree with this opinion. In this essay, I want to discuss and explain my point of view.
Firstly
, I think that if a person is good in
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other subjects, Change preposition
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then
she has chance
to make up a good career. Add an article
a chance
the chance
For instance
, i
have a sister who did not want to teach Change the capitalization
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in
academic subjects but was better at drawing. Change preposition
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However
, she may not be able to do well in school exams, but she was very good at drawing and had enough skill
in drawing. Fix the agreement mistake
skills
Therefore
, she decided to enter the University where she taught art and want to open her your
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As a result
, my sister may Correct your spelling
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be an engineer or something, but she may Correct your spelling
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maybe
may be
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maybe
this
job will bring her Correct your spelling
success
succes
in later life.
To some Correct your spelling
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extent
these interests help people to self-knowledge. Add a comma
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In other words
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music bring out the hidden talents in a person. Correct your spelling
and
For example
, dancing in some forms help
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Consequently
, that self-knowledge helps them reduce their aggressive nature.
In conclusion, i
guess that everyone can individually go to circles and develop there. For Change the capitalization
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one does not need to offer a lot of time for art or music, since this
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion