Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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by children should not
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during
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during
the school day while
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others think the opposite. Considering
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children'
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distraciton
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distraction
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the
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phones
could be effective on their
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, but
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, the
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developed
technology
such
as
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phones
and
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provides a
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wise
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to use
phones
as a helper for kids. In the present
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, teenagers use their
phones
as
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counted as the main cause of distraction from
education
to
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socialising
socialisation
while lectures going on. The ability to
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and
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messages is the most compelling fact to lose the flow in
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whether being sender or receiver
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children who carry a phone but don't use it in classes, tend to read and react to the message when the child
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one.
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of
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permission
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phone usage
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school time,
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problem stands on the purpose of
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. If students would use
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wisely
,
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smart
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phones
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help
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learners
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lecturers in
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education
instituies
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institutes
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our lives with
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jump
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technology
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provides unlimited sources. Pupils can reach
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knowledge
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easily
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one click on their
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phones
phone
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phones
. Finding a simple
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detailed
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clearly is the most important example
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how could be beneficial for
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improvement
improvemnt
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on their success. To
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summarize
,
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which is the
phones
how using by teenagers in school day based on the aim stood by a tool of distraction or a
way
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subjects clearly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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