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These days huge portions of population are moving from rural areas to urban areas. Do you think it is a positive or a negative trend?

#portions #population #areas #trend
SELF-CONNECTION So how can we, Nguyen Trai students do something to save the
environment
? Well, we can volunteer in cleaning groups in different places.
For example
, More than 700 volunteers attended the "World Cleanup Day 2022" event. To raise community awareness and call on the community to act together for the green
environment
 of the Capital, World Cleanup Day was held. The total volume of garbage collected at Pham Hung road is 1,846kg (more than 1.8 tons). It is a simple but meaningful thing that we can do to contribute to making the scenery of our city more beautiful and saving the
environment
. Another thing that we can do is propagate. You can do a simple thing of telling your family members, and your classmates to save the
environment
 by doing practical things. You can work as a collaborator for student newspapers
such
 as Hoa Hoc Tro,... to propagate to more people about environmental protection.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • positive trend
  • negative trend
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • services
  • standard of living
  • overcrowding
  • strained resources
  • pollution
  • environmental problems
  • rural livelihoods
  • culture
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