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The map illustrates two proposed sites for the construction of a new supermarket (S) in the countryside of Garlsdon, with a total population of 65,000. Overall, the
first
 possible site is in the outskirt of the
town
, which is in the middle of the railway and the main roads, whereas the
second
 possible site is in the middle of the
town
, surrounded by housing and industries. With regards to the
first
 proposed location, it will be in the rural area, on the northwest side of Garlsdon, which is 12 kilometres
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 Hindon with an estimated population of 10,000. There is access to both the railway and the main roads making it convenient for people at the extreme end of the
town
 to have access. Looking at the map, the
second
 possible location is in the
town
 centre with no traffic.
Also
, it is closer to where a majority of people reside and the industrial area as well.
However
, it is 25 kilometres away from the people of
Cransdon
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Cranston
 which has about 29,000 folks. Again, it is about 16 kilometres
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brandson
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brands on
 with a population of 15,000.
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