many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree

It is believed that produced food and drink which contain high
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level
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humans
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health.Since they cause many diseases
such
as heart problems,
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and diabetics
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diabetics
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,the government should increase the cost of sugar
products
that will make them accessible and force
population
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the population
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to intake less
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carbohydrate
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.In my opinion , reducing environmental health issues by making
prices
higher is a good
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decision
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decision
. To start with today's problem
mainly
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caused by the difference
of
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prices
between healthy and harmful food,but
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intervention
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prices
in
this
field could change the situation totally.
Firstly
,more expensive sugary
products
will encourage
people
to consume less of
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.Making junky food less accessible by changing the price ,force
people
to buy other ,more healthy
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.
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,when individuals have
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between
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with
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level of sugar and
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2 portions of
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soup at the same price ,they will
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the
second
option. The
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issues caused by intaking harmful snacks
also
may reduce by increasing the
prices
of sugary
products
.The lack of
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choice
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among unhealthy
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lead
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individuals to become
more
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healthier by changing their diets.
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,when
people
's
diet
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diets
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include only beneficial
products
for an organism,
people
can't have health problems
such
as obesity.Making
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of
products
less desirable helps to improve the quality of life for almost every
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. To summarize,manufactured things with high sugar level results
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lot of diseases and changing the cost for them can encourage
people
to consume less junky eats.
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, it
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people
to lead
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lifestyle.Generally ,it is one of the best options to improve society's well-being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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