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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Globalization is creating a world with a single culture and destroying national identity in the process. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people likes to wear fashionable clothes Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing?

In some countries, m any more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to the new buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree? How important are old buildings to us?

PEOPLE NOWADAYS ARE NOT FIT AND ACTIVE THAN THE PEOPLE FROM THE OLDEN DAYS. DISCUSS THE CAUSES FOR THIS SITUATION AND SUGGEST SOME POSSIBLE SITUATIONS.