The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make ccomparisons where relevant.
The pie charts and line chart illustrate the data about the trend of learning musical instruments among
children
in propotion
in 1996 and 2016 in the UK.
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proportion
Overall
, the number of children
partaking in music underwent a significant rise after 20 years. Piano and keyboard were by far the most popular instruments.
44% children
learnt Change preposition
of children
musical
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a musical
instrument
, compared to 56% of those who did not take part in any music lesson in 1996. Fix the agreement mistake
instruments
In contrast
, the number of children
having musical classes was three times higher than that of those who did not learn musical instruments,76% and 24% respectively in 2016.
Piano in 1996 and Keyboard in 2016 shared the similar parttern
at 30%. Acoustic guitar, violin, and electric guitar accounted for 8%, 14%, and 13% respectively in 1996. Notably, in 2016, Correct your spelling
pattern
violin
witnessed a decrease Correct article usage
the violin
by
4% Change preposition
of
while
acoustic
guitar dropped three times.Correct article usage
the acoustic
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