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some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided Discuss both views and your own opinion?

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There are many big question marks according to how
parents
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 can deal with their
children
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 specifically
teenagers
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. Referring to several approaches and different kinds of views, specialists and psychologists have a variety of thises that work depending on personal mindset. Some ideas believe that conflict between
parents
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 and
teenagers
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 is
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 due to many factors
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 as
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 in their hormones, different insights, and living experiences. So, it is not strange to occur
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misunderstanding
misunderstandings
misundrestanding
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 between two generations. A mature person better knows how
face
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 to a problematic situation according to experiences that he has gained and
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teenagers
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 be
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able
abale
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 to provide a good solution. With a combination of these two
views
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 it is possible to understand
teenagers
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 feeling and be
more calm
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 about conflicts. In another view, some
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 are thinking
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 conflict can hurt something and have an unwanted impact on their
children
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 and their future.
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 group count only on their experiences and
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 not want to accept any other alternatives. They think it is impossible that
teenagers
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 can find a more reliable path to achieve a goal. There is
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 idiom about
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 people say "I am so sorry that the world has been changed but people have not". In my opinion, the responsible of
children
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 and
teenagers
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 growing up is
educational
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the educational
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 system.
Parents
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 do not know what
it
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is well-suited for their
children
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 always and it is a truth. Everyone has some issues that can deliver to the
next
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 generation and just an educational system can avoid
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the decision
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decision
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 for the future if
teenagers
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 should be done their own ideas because everyone knows about
own
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 talents and abilities. In conclusion, we never can choose an approach. We have to respect
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different types of views and have to find a solution to deal with them because there are many manners to reach
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goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • individuality
  • emotional intelligence
  • conflict resolution skills
  • persistent
  • unresolved
  • communication gaps
  • rebellious behavior
  • substance abuse
  • mental health issues
  • critical skills
  • deeper understanding
  • family dynamics
  • quest for independence
  • crucial for adulthood
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