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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of High School programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is the perception of some people that it should be a requirement for high school
students
 to participate in any social work without pay. Community work is an integral part of flourished societies. I accept that there are clear benefits of
this
 public service but I believe that it is too early for teenagers to perform
such
 tasks. On the one hand, helping others who are in need has a plethora of constructive outcomes.
Firstly
, it is very beneficial for the welfare of society because if juveniles engage themselves in the well-being of others
then
 it will motivate many adults to follow them which will lead to a healthy community.
Secondly
, a sense of responsibility will be created in youngsters at a very early age in
this
 way they could become civilized members of a country
for example
, in different schools in Pakistan,
students
 contribute themselves in organizing different stalls to raise money for orphanages and many select
this
 as an occupation and help society in broader ways. In short, it is necessary for the betterment of humans.
On the other hand
, there are a few drawbacks to any community service program for teenagers. Fundamentally, it is the phase of life in which pupils need to have more focus on their studies
instead
 of extra-curricular activities as their future depends on their performance in the whole academic year and it is a very critical time for their studies.
Moreover
, free welfare work can cause low enthusiasm in younger minds, if they are not getting any monetary payments in return
then
 they will get bored
from
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 their voluntary jobs very quickly.
For instance
, many
students
 do not perform
good
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 in
such
 kinds of assignments in Government schools of Lahore and get
a low grades
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 in them. In conclusion, despite the advantages of voluntary jobs, in my opinion, there is good ground for rejecting the view due to its compulsion at the early age of
students
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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