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Many working people get little or no excercise either during the working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Exercising has become one of the most important
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 of modern society.Unfortunately, a large number of
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 merely do physical activities, and
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 leads to some bad consequences
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 their health.
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 essay will discuss the reasons why
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 is happening and put several solutions to tackle
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 issue. One of the many reasons why working
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 don'
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excercice
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exercise
 is simply the lack of
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 to do it.
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 who
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 8 hours per day throughout the week usually have a tight
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schedule
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, between doing their job, meeting friends, grocery shopping and even home chores, it's hard for them to make a special
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exercise
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, few actually do, mainly due to the lack of free
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 some
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 complain about being exhausted after
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, particularly those who
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 in manual labour jobs, lifting weights after 8 hours of hard
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 doesn'
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 seem like a fun thing to do, that's why they seldom exercise. There are a lot of ways to get
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 to do sports more frequently,
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 a training session doesn'
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 have to be so long to be effective, a 20-30 minute session would be
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sufficient
,
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,
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a workout
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 can be done at home, there are
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plenty
 of at-home workout that doesn'
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 require a lot of
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equipment
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, doing exercise in the early morning can be suitable for a lot of
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, a recent study revealed that
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 who do sports in the morning tend to be more productive in the workplace in comparison with their fellow colleagues. to conclude, the most likely reasons why working
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 get
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more
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 exercise is because of the lack of free
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 and
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 tiredness after a long day of
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. Training early in the morning,
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 workout
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programmes
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programmes
 or 20-30 minutes sessions would be convenient for
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