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Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Dear Lauren, I am writing
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time off
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 because I have my sister´s wedding on the 2nd of December, the wedding will be in Colombia. As you know Colombia
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 far away from Australia so
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 will need at least 3 weeks off. I will be away from
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Monday 2nd of December and I will be back in
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office on the 24th of January, as I know that December and January is the busiest time at the office, I would like to suggest that I can
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 I can
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 for 2 weeks, 2 days per week. I have been
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role for almost two years I can manage all the
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 by myself.
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, I can start working one extra hour every day after 4:30 for 5 weeks so I can make the time that I will be away. Please let me know if it
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 for you and for the business. Kind Regards Juliana
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