In the developed world, average life expactancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that caould be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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In today's world lifespan of an individual has been increasing.
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, some think that it has adverse effects on
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themselves as well as on the community.
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situation. To commence with , considering from youngsters viewpoint.
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impose more pay on young workers to provide sufficient pension to old ages people . To explain it, as the life period is increasing nowadays, more and more people are retiring from their work and relying on the
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's money . For that,
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new generations.
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shocking ramification that an individual pay 50% more tax than past and the main reason behind
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a distribution of that money among the oldster. Moving towards the solution of the problem, the
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should maximize the age for retirement from 60 to 65 , so that people who feel healthy in their old age can still work and in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • age-related illnesses
  • financial burden
  • pension systems
  • working-age population
  • labor shortages
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • mental health issues
  • dependency ratio
  • healthy lifestyles
  • family-friendly policies
  • automation
  • technology
  • social programs
  • sustainability
  • incentives
  • retirement
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