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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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It is true that many people and children love playing
video
games
. Some people
harbor
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 a belief that these
games
 can have a positive effect on users, while others hold
the
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reserve
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 viewpoint. From my perspective, they are more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand,
video
games
 can be both entertaining and educational. Users and gamers can be included in a visual world which is more enthusiastic and engaging than real-life activities. From an
education
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 perspective, these
games
 can encourage resourcefulness and creativity, as well as concentration and logical thinking.
Moreover
, these
video
games
 can afford a source of income.
For example
, Faker, who is a famous gamer of League of
Legend
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Legends
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, was paid almost 6 million dollars per year and by just playing
games
 he took on the role of supporting the entire family.
Nonetheless
, I would quarrel that
these assistance
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were
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 outweighed by the obstacles. Playing
video
games
 could be remarkably addictive because users are pursuing the scores, new targets, new missions and new records to keep players playing.
In addition
, children
who
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are efficiently fascinated by
colors
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colours
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 and selected graphics in these
games
. They will spend hours each trying to through all the chapters of the game.
This
 could have effects on the ranking of children at school, they could sleep or have trouble concentrating on the lectures of teachers.
Furthermore
, they could not
not
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get high scores or even lose various soft skills by spending
a
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little time on the computer or console.
This
 resulted in unemployment and loss in terms of what they
want
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 for their personal life. In conclusion,
although
potential
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the potential
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 dangers of
video
games
 are significant,
games
also
 have sundry conclusive on social life.
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