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Some people argue that cars should be banned in the city centres while other are against in this idea. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The banning of motor vehicles in the central
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 is proposed by several individuals.
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, there are some
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 objecting to
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essay I will discuss both perspectives on banning
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 in the
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centre
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 and I will give my opinion. On the one hand, the reason why some
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 want to restrict the
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 in the
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centre
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 is the increase in traffic-related accidents. Many motor vehicle owners are recklessly driving and disregarding traffic signs around busy areas which results in many roads relating accidents
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 as vehicle rear-end collisions. According to the report published by "Publicus Asia" 45% of road-related accidents happen in the
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centre
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 since 2019 it is due to negligence of the driver in traffic rules and drinking while driving.
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, there are
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 some
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 who object to
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 It will slow down the
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 working in the busy
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 due to the cutting trip of public transportation. Nowadays, the majority of
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blue-collar job is located in the central
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. Cutting trips of public utility vehicles will lead to a number of employees taking extra time before they can get to their work which results in a decrease in productivity levels among employees. In my opinion, restricting the
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centre
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 the government should educate drivers to obey the traffic rule and at the same time increase the fine for that violator or revoke their driver's license to solve
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 problem. In conclusion, Banning
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 in busy centres will result in a much bigger problem and more employees are getting affected.
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, the government should make any necessary steps to address
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 issue.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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