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News channels only give good news on publications. Do you agree or disagree

#news #channels #publications
It is well known that over time
media
 has been changing. Nowadays, it can be seen different
news
 channels and topics specifically for the kind
audience
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 who are heading,
nevertheless
, that does not mean the publications given are only good. I completely disagree with
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 statement, in
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reason
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reasons
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 why it is not true.
To begin
 with, only
shared
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 positive
information
 with the audience
it
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is almost impossible because of the
rapidly
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 advance of
the
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technology, with the creation of
the
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social
media
such
 as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram the public can have
the
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information
 in a fast way. No one can deny
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globalization and one of
their
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 consequences is that
people
 are more connected
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all
the
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 globe,
therefore
, do not post bad
news
 it is difficult, almost impossible.
For instance
, even if a channel does not share
bad
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news
 that
it
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is happening in a country, with the new communication tools
people
 will have the
information
 very fast. Another significant aspect relates
media
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 and journalists has the obligation to tell the truth,
for example
,
law
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the law
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assure
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assures
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 the importance of
the
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true
information
communicate
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 to the
people
 even if it is good or bad.
On the other hand
, for a channel it would be a good strategy only communicate good
news
,
hence
 they can be more profitable against their competence.
However
,
this
 could not
be
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possible,
thus
the
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technology had allowed to
people
 have
the
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information
 faster than ever, even
it
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 is fake
news
. To conclude, in my opinion, the
news
 can not only publish good
news
 and their channel, one reason
it
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is the professionalism a
media
 should have and
other
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 is the
advance
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 technology
inform
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 publications faster than ever to the community.
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