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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this? Write at least 250 words.

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In major cities around the world,
people
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 are living in
apartments
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 due to limited space and high population. Due to the hectic lifestyle,
people
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 do not have time to get to know their
neighbours
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the problems it could cause among
people
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 and offer possible solutions.
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 off, two main issues may arise due to living in isolation, like
people
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 cannot get
support
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 from their
neighbours
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 in case of an emergency and
people
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 do not aware that there will not be any
security
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 threat due to the
neighbours
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. When
tenants
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 have fewer connections with
people
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next
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 door, they would not able to get
support
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 from the
neighbours
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 when it's an urgent situation.
For instance
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, when there is a
security
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 threat , it may be difficult to get
support
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 from the
neighbours
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.
Further
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, there may be a
security
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 threat when
tenants
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 do not know about the
neighbours
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.
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, certain units in the
apartments
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 are vacant, sometimes intruders might live in those units to steal valuables from other units. The two major strategies could be implemented to manage the above-mentioned issues
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 as arranging social activities and introducing new
tenants
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 to other occupants. Apartment management can arrange monthly get-together and request all the occupants to attend it.
This
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 may help them to get know to each other and will create a peaceful atmosphere in the
apartments
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.
In addition
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, apartment management can introduce new occupants to other
tenants
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 in-person or through social media groups
such
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 as Whatsapp groups.
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 could eliminate the confusion of
people
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 roaming around in the
apartments
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. To conclude,
people
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 who live in
apartments
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 in major cities do not know their
neighbours
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 due to their hectic or fast-moving lifestyles.
This
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 lifestyle causes many problems
such
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 as a lack of
support
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 and
security
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 threats from the
neighbours
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.These could be managed by introducing new
tenants
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 to other
people
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 and arranging social activities periodically within the
apartments
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.
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