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Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree .

#topic #college #students #home #parents
College age
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 is the most effective age for an individual. In
this
 period of three to four
years
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,years
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 students learn the real meaning of
life
 and how to be independent, what career to choose, how money is earned and how to deal with
life
. In my ,opinion I agree with
this
 passage.
Firstly
, I would like to express my opinion about how it is beneficial in today's fast-moving world, children should be given the freedom to choose whether to stay with family or to settle in some hostel. Hostel
life
 will teach you how to balance your personal chores and studies with any dependency on your
parents
 for food, shelter or basic needs. They will have to buy their own stuff from the market and will deal with different
life
 situations,
this
 will increase their decision-making skills, and self-confidence and will give them the capacity to choose what is right or wrong.
Secondly
, if the kin chooses to stay with family
then
 he/she will not be able to channelise their own thinking process. Students studying abroad, face many challenges to help them prepare for that children in their graduation years should be made ready to take up all
life
 challenges. Practical knowledge
,
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 and experiences will polish a child more than any book or study. He/she will be open to any experience which suits them whether a job or a business, how to collect funds for a business, how to deal with a love
life
, and how to manage expenses in a limited manner. To conclude, children should be under the shelter of their
parents
 till the age of eighteen,
parents
 should teach them
life
 skills, what is good and bad, how to overcome random
life
 challenges, and if needed they can talk or discuss things with their
parents
.
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