More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays tons of wild
animals
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are on the verge of extinction and others are
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on the endangered list. The main cause of these is mankind and illegal hunting.
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, including laws passed by the government and nationwide campaigns can solve
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Problem.
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with, overpopulation has caused humans to encroach on land, which now mankind takes up more and more area and
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this
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animals
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lose their natural habitats.
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, in the deforestation of the Amazon, a total of 23 birds and other species were extinct.
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, illegal hunting is the other most prominent reason for animal extinction.
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, people hunt
animals
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for recreational activities and for their skin.
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, most circuses
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by wild
animals
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. Some solutions can be adapted to improve the situation. First and foremost, including laws passed by the government in the
parliment
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parliament
against illegal hunting.
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it would restrict people from killing wild
animals
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.
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, Asia countries passed a law to protect the indigenous
deers
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, and it helped to save native
deers
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.
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, the local authorities should launch nationwide campaigns to sensitise people about the importance of conserving wildlife, so that there can be an improvement in the number of younger ones. In conclusion, mankind and illegal hunting are the main
reason
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reasons
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for
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decline in the wildlife population worldwide.
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, the government passes laws and nationwide campaigns can solve
this
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problem.
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