Family has a great influence on children's development. However, the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?

An increasing number of group of people

believes

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that

,

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numerous children's growth depends upon family members. While

,

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few of them accept kids maturing

take

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place beyond their family and outside the

home

. I strongly admit, and agree

maturing

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to mature

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of a

child

majorly takes place at

home

.

Also

, I will elaborate

to

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on

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both

the

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apply

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perspective

further

in

this

essay. Undoubtedly, I

belief

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believe

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the concept of evolution of any kid happen under the guidance of

there

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their

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parents.

For instance

, many children consider

father

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their father

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or mother

their

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there

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as a role model.

Likewise

, they tend to impersonate their qualities and bloom.

In other words

, the environment at the

child

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child's

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home

also

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develop

developed

develope

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develops

the forming behaviour or attitude of a

child

,

that

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and that

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same character will be reflected by him in

the

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apply

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society.

Secondly

,

this

is not limited to one's

families

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family

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,

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in fact

infact

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in fact

the relatives and other close

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members

memebers

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members

also

nurture the advancement in a kid. To illustrate, like talking

skill

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skills

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, how to manage family and relations, developing good relation to

sibblings

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siblings

and be helpful to the city.

On the other hand

, it can't be underrated outside

home

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the home

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also

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and also

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give inputs in a

child

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child's

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evolvement

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evolution

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. Take

for

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,for

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example,

Schooling

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the Schooling

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of a kid and their peers can progress in

team work

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teamwork

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building and coping

the

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with the

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competition

competetion

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competition

in

outer

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the outer

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world. In conclusion, I firmly

belief

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believe

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aforementioned

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the aforementioned

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essay support my views.

However

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I

also

think more or less both the

circumtances

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circumstances

altogether can be

greatway

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great way

greatly

to the success.