More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem? Problem and solution

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, over the years,there

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an increasing number of animal species that are going extinct and others are getting endangered.

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essay will discuss some of the

reason

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why it is happening and propose some ways to mitigate the issues. With regards to animals that are going to extinction one of the main causes which can be cited is

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climate change, not only caused by humans but

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due to

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natural cycles that

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is constantly passing through.These changes may affect their natural habitats forcing them to migrate to other regions

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fatal

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leading them to starvation

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consequent death.

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, it is believed that the dinosaur had gone extinct, because of natural change.

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, humans are

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responsible for animal extinction. Deforestation can be a solid reason here.Because of

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animals

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their lives at risk. Many of them are forced to wander into villages for food.

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, since they pose a threat to people’s lives and property, they are often killed. There

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number

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of ways to control

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situation like educating the people,

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departments for the care of wild animals.

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government

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the government

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have to identify the endangered ones and provide protective shelters for their growth.

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, there has to be a ban on the killing of rare ones and heavy fines have to be imposed on the defaulters.

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humans, being a superior

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, have the responsibility to keep a check on

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nature,

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to keep an eye on the harmful acts of fellow beings.

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task response

The essay partially addresses the prompt, but the ideas are not fully developed.

coherence and cohesion

The essay lacks overall coherence and cohesion, with some unclear or unrelated ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem? Problem and solution

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many, small local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does thsi affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?

Some people think that younger people are not suitable for important positions in government. Others think that it will be a good idea for younger people to take on these positions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, people are not living longer the ever before. some people say an aging population, create problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if he has more elderly people. To what extent to the advantages of having an Asian population outweigh the disadvantages.

Many people say that globalization and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. Write at least 250 words