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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem? Problem and solution

#animals #verge #extinction #list
It is clear that
, over the years,there
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 an increasing number of animal species that are going extinct and others are getting endangered.
This
 essay will discuss some of the
reason
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 why it is happening and propose some ways to mitigate the issues. With regards to animals that are going to extinction one of the main causes which can be cited is
the
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climate change, not only caused by humans but
also
due to
 natural cycles that
earth
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 is constantly passing through.These changes may affect their natural habitats forcing them to migrate to other regions
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fatal
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 leading them to starvation
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 consequent death.
For instance
, it is believed that the dinosaur had gone extinct, because of natural change.
On the other hand
, humans are
also
 responsible for animal extinction. Deforestation can be a solid reason here.Because of
this
 animals
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 their lives at risk. Many of them are forced to wander into villages for food.
However
, since they pose a threat to people’s lives and property, they are often killed. There
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number
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 of ways to control
this
 situation like educating the people,
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the
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departments for the care of wild animals.
Furthermore
,
government
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 have to identify the endangered ones and provide protective shelters for their growth.
Nevertheless
, there has to be a ban on the killing of rare ones and heavy fines have to be imposed on the defaulters.
To conclude
,
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humans, being a superior
creature
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creatures
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, have the responsibility to keep a check on
the
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nature,
as well as
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to keep an eye on the harmful acts of fellow beings.
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task response
The essay partially addresses the prompt, but the ideas are not fully developed.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks overall coherence and cohesion, with some unclear or unrelated ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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