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Some people say that the best of improve road safety is to icrease the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, accidents are soaring at a very high speed, In order to control that govt should definitely take action and upgrade the rules right away. A large number of people argue that
government
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 should update the legal
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 for driving and riding from 18 years to 22 years. I completely agree with the statement.
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 and Foremost, these kids are very enthusiastic at the
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 of 18 and try to show off all the time.
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, they drive or ride very roughly which affects the lives of other citizens.
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, One of my cousins suffered an accident recently due to the mistake of a teenage boy who was driving his car over-speed on the wrong side. if anyone especially his parents could
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 stopped him or
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 increase the
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 of driving
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 accident could not have happened and the cousin would have worked at his job. So I think the
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 should take the action and change the driving
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. Probing
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 to conception, I would like to add some more reasons. these juveniles not only like to stunt but
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 love to rule breaking
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 as light jumping and over-speeding at
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age
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.
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 should change the
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 so they are little mature to understand the importance of life and follow the rules and regulations. In conclusion, even though
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 thinks that 18 years are enough for driving a car or riding a bike but
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 should think that due to the lack of importance of life these kids make a lot of mistakes, govt should update the
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 now.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mature
  • responsible
  • accidents
  • emotional maturity
  • road conditions
  • hazards
  • impulsive behavior
  • risk assessment
  • inexperienced drivers
  • driver education
  • road safety measures
  • driver training programs
  • stricter testing
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • automated driving systems
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