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‘Cannabis has been classified as a Class B drug in the UK since 2008 and carries a prison sentence of up to five years for possession.’ (Source: The Week) Many countries have decriminalised the use of cannabis and as a result have seen a reduction in drug related crime. Should cannabis and other soft drugs use be legalised? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are controversial perspectives heating up a debate
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 the authority should permit
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 and other kinds of stimulants. While some claim that legitimizing the
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 of
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 can lead to a deterioration in
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drug related
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 crime, the opposite makes a statement that
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 should be legalised. In my opinion,
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 urgent problem. It is obvious to note that approving people to consume Class B drug types does
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 for the lives of residents.
Cannabis
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 is considered a type of medicine – some scientific findings demonstrated cannabinoid in
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 is commonly
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 for certain diseases and has
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 effect on humans.
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, Holland and some states in America permit growing and trading
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 in both of healthcare system and entertainment. In terms of
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, they are used as a therapy to treat and control certain cancers. Regarding recreation, marijuana induces a feeling of euphoria and relaxation in its users.
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,
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 and other kinds of
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 should be approved for widespread
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 by the authority.
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 accepting to utilize Class B classification
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 has some advantages, it is bad for people to overdose. Authorizing communities to make
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 and
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 these
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 can considerably increase medical risks and addiction rates among those who
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 them.
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 make them feel
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 and rarely able to control the right frame of mind.
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, statistics show that driving under influence of Class B
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 has caused countless traffic accidents in the US, where these things are legal.
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, if the government enacts a law to
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 marijuana, it will endanger
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 of residents and communities. In my conclusion, allowing the entire population to have the right to
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cannabis
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 and other genres of
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 bring more harm than good. For that reason, these things still should be controlled by the government.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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