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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
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In my opinion, I absolutely disagree with
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 point of view. With the development of society, more and more people prefer to read
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 on the
Internet
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. I believe that reading
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 on the
internet
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 is still the most important source of
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, even more so than
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.
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, you can read a lot of information that you want to read; it’s very convenient to filter out all the things that you really want to see. You can access the
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 to read the
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 while working or studying at the same time.
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, if you want to know what happened on a given
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, you can use Google to find out.
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, a lot of information will be displayed, and you can choose the link you want to read.
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, the images used to illustrate the content on the
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 are more clear and more colourful than those used in
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. It is important to show realistic images, which is what the
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 talks about.
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, if you read the
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 in the traditional papers, you cannot imagine the pictures of what happened because they do not have any colour, only white and black. Sometimes it does not have any pictures, so we cannot brainstorm about what the
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 is saying.
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, it can update the
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 quickly. According to the traditional newspaper, it takes nearly one to two days for the journalists to write, and it takes more time to publish than print. Aside from that, it only takes a few hours for the
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news
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 to be updated for us to read.
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, reading
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 in the traditional way is often preferred by the elderly, because it has been followed by them for more than half of their lives and their eyes are less affected by blue light than everyone these days.
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 but not least, I think these reasons are making more and more people read
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 on the
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 because they can save money
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 of buying
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 every
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. Not everyone in
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 world has the money and time to buy a newspaper every
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. It is more expensive than reading the
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 on the
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. It will contribute to environmental protection. If we save paper and ink every
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 and do not cut down trees to make paper, the number of trees will increase every year. So it can limit the cutting and waste of green resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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