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Lack of practical skills is the main reason for unemployment among youth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A group of people opine that practical knowledge is the only cause for lacking jobs among the ages
between
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of
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 18-25 years. I completely disagree with
this
 proposition and will represent relevant points along with precise examples and back up my view.
First
 of all, most of the time not possible to available opportunities to gather practical skills and
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those who
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 are fresher in the
job
 line, so do not get a chance to learn practical knowledge. Any educational institute, even
government
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the government
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 not provide these
type
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types
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 of facilities.
For example
, every year, a group of students complete their studies and search
jobsjob
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jobs job
 at
this
 time, they do not have any scope to build their skills.
Moreover
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 nowadays people do not get according to their expectations in
job
 sectors. so , people lost their interest in service,
as
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 a result, teenagers are attracted to
business
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the business
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.
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, most of the Bangladeshi young generation are reluctant to
job
, because of the teeny facilities, so they involve
different
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 types of trades.
However
, there are many jobs for needs practical skill. due to lake of practical knowledge, they do not get
this
 type of
job
.
For instance
, aircraft pilots need
high
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highly
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 skilled employees, because they don't have any opportunities to learn after joining the
job
. Even garments sector freshers avail a long time to learn their skills, which hampered the total chain of production. In conclusion, it is obvious that government should take versatile initiatives to
accelerateaccelerated
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accelerate accelerated
job
 vacancies and increase their facilities for attracting jobs and to reduce unemployment among the young.
Hence
, I restate my opinion in favour of
this
 argument.
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