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Full time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In the present era, we see students who mostly tend to indulge the majority of their
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 in studying and not devote much of their
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 to any other activity. Being studious is good but every person needs to spare some
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 for other activities as well which would be discussed in the essay.
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, a pupil who has gotten into a reputed university is obviously worried about his or her grades but only being bookish won't take them anywhere as knowledge, physical strength and a stress-free mind are desirable in order to survive till the
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, a recent study showed that students of the top 5 universities of India take 50% more stress
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 a normal college student as they feel it's only studying that would make them succeed in life.
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, it is paramount for a student to get himself involved in an activity which can be anything related to spending
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 out in nature, following a sport or maybe just a talk with someone. Adding on, a number of students choose to make a professional career out of the extracurricular activities and sports where they involve themselves,
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 their studies which is a boost as they find their own happiness in doing so rather
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 just being devoted to their studies.
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, we all know a number of Cricketers who followed their passion towards the game like Virat Kohli who is a sensation for cricket fans but he was not so studious in his college days rather was more devoted towards cricket. To Conclude, it is not just the study which takes a person towards success but a combination of discrete activities in which they should all be active in order to have a secure and healthy future.
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  • soft skills
  • mental health
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  • stress and burnout
  • networking opportunities
  • career opportunities
  • time management
  • prioritize
  • juggle multiple responsibilities
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  • community engagement
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