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With the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What do you think of the importance of letter-writing?

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smartphones
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smart phones
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 and computers is becoming increasingly popular around the world. Some might think that
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messages
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messages
 and emails will substitute the traditional
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, I believe that the importance of writing letters can’t be replaced and writing
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 won’t
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 with, it is without a doubt that texting
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hand writing
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 since people only need to
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 a finger or two to communicate with others.
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, it can be
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, with the development of
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 we can contact
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others within seconds,
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, it might take a week or two for your letter to be
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delivered
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delivered
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, keeping in touch
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 phones and computers can be
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 friendly, due to the reduced
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, even with
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texting brings, I still regard it will not
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 over
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handwriting
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hand writing
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 in the future. The main reason is
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hand writing
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 can show a gesture of love, which texting can’t achieve.
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, writing your friend a birthday card will make her happier than,
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sending her birthday texts.
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, people can feel
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emotions
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emotions
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 we often feel more touched by letters
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 numerous benefits, both for humans and the environment,
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, the sentiments that
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hand writing
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transmit
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 still cannot be replaced.
As a result
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, I believed that the traditional technique of
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handwriting
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hand writing
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 will not totally disappear in the foreseeing future.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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