Some people believe that using social media instead of watching television at young ages. How are the advantages and disadvantages of this topic?

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modern era,
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platform has become an inevitable part
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the life of youth and is booming day by day.
However
, the focus of the essay is to talk over the merits and demerits of
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of social
media
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rather than paying attention
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screen
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teenagers and those shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, of the many
advantages
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one of the main
advantage
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of social
media
on television is that individuals can access
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the network according to their convenience. To elaborate, young
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ones
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can make
use
of social
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media
meadia
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media
network
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networks
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according to their free time.
Moreover
, it provides the
opprtunity
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opportunity
of
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variety of
informations
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than a television.
Furthermore
, social
media
allow people to communicate with persons in another nation without any barriers. To clarify, it is simple as well as cheap to contact dear and near ones through social
media
platform
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platforms
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where
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television cannot assist in these situations.
For example
, social
medias
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media
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like
facebook
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,
instagram
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Instagram
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and
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WhatsApp
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watsapp
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are extremely serving not only in communication but
also
sharing things for educational
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purposes
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.
On the other hand
,
social
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platform has many drawbacks too. Of the many
demerits
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one of the main
disadvantage
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is the misuse of teenagers. To be precise, there is a chance to mislead the younger generation through social
media
and it may threaten
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their
thier
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their
life.
For instance
,
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study conducted by Law students in Kerala in 2018 depicted that 47% of illegal activities
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occurred
occured
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occur
by the enormous
use
of social
media
in small age.
In addition
,
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use
of social
media
may drastically affect young children's education. To clarify, students may
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concentration on their studies by the
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over
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use
of
social
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network
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networks
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. To conclude, understanding the pros of social
media
on
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such
as
the
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easy access at any time and the demerits
such
as
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life threatening
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situations, it is hopeful that young age individuals will assess and utilize the assistance of social
media
wisely in the days to come.
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