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Some people argue that techonological inventions, such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive. Do agree or disagree?

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Many
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 believe that electronic devices like smartphones are causing
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 to be less social. There are some definite pros and cons to
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 statement. On the one hand, using gadgets like phones can actually help us communicate with each other better. It enables
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 to chat or call each other much more easily and conveniently rather than meeting each other in person.
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, if a person wants to call their friends to catch up with each other, that person could use their phone, tablet, or computer to call that friend.
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 is much faster than meeting each other face to face.
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,
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 spend too much
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 using the internet.
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 would have to sit down for a prolonged period of
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 and look at a screen.
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 would certainly lessen the
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 they spend with their friends and family.
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, the more
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people
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 spend on the computer or phone, the less
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 they are interacting with others.
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 will lead to being much less socially interactive. In conclusion, I believe that technological gadgets are making
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 more social owing to the fact that they can communicate with
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 more easily by calling or texting each other.
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