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Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Having an abundance of fortune totally has a lot of advantages. One of them is being able to be more philanthropic. I personally agree with
this
 statement and will try to explain the reasons.
Firstly
, being rich means you would have to consider less about your daily and obligatory expenses,
such
 as food, taxes, electricity, and so on. Those primary necessities will already be covered and
hence
 it is easier to sympathize with others who haven't fulfilled their primary needs and eventually help them.
Secondly
, to have a lot of money means you are more privileged to decide on your action or
life
 choices. When you can do almost everything with your money for your
life
, you would want to do something with other
people
's
life
 using your money and hopefully,
affecting
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 other
people
's
life
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for
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a
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good
intention
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 by lifting their condition up. Even though the alternative of being rich could bring some
down side
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 to a human being
such
 as
apathetical
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apathetic
apathetically
behavior
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 towards other
people
 and numbness to care about other
people
 because the rich
already
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 being indulged by lavishness. To sum up my opinion, I believe being rich is a tool
as
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 an opportunity to help those in need. There is nothing more important
for
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 being rich than to have the power to help others.
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