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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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There is a controversial notion heating a debate that immigrants should adapt to new conventions and customs of that country.
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, I completely agree with
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 opinion. It is clear that the custom of the country is important to local
people
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,
therefore
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 newcomers who tend to settle in one bucolic should have knowledge of its tradition. Because if migrants do not know about
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, they can face some difficult issues or have difficulty
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integrating with other
people
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 which can create a cultural
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barrier
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barries
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.For
this
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 reason, if they do not know about the habit, they may
be
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get into the pitfalls
from
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crime
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crime
.
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Furthermore
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, Understanding about laws of
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another country
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,
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 will help foreigners not be punished for falling foul of the law.
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, in
Sigapore
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Singapore
,
people
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 will be fined if they throw trash or litter anywhere.
On the other hand
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, there are
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 many benefits for foreigners to understand new
habit
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.One advantage is that they will be more welcomed and increase
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 of brotherhood.
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, if the immigrants understand clearly one country’s
habit
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habits
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, they can
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easily
easly
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easily
 take part in
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the festival
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festival
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festivals
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 and have
mutual
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 understanding.
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, if they wear
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traditional custom
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 as
:
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 Ao Dai or Kimono, they will gain more respect from local
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 and increase the sense of harmony.
Other benefits
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Another benefit
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 is that they can gain more money from business activities, through understanding their customers which
promote
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promotes
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 their
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products
produts
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products
 and gain more profit.
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, to
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recapitulate
 according to the argument mentioned above it has clearly indicated that,
people
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 must follow the habits and the traditions of a new society when they will not live in that nation.
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