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Renewable energy, such as solar and wind power, have shown great promise. However, they have often disappointed in practice.

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It is said that wind and solar
power
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 look very perspective,
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, they do not meet the expectation in practice.
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, it is strongly believed, that renewable
energy
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 has made steady success in people’s lives. Below, l will start with some reasons for these and give advantages.
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, the community has to take care of their environment, which is why alternative sources of
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 are a very outstanding opportunity for that. Fossil fuels have to be replaced with solar and wind
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.
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, people will face disastrous climate problems. Nowadays, the amount of usage of solar batteries and electric cars has increased rapidly.
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, the statistics show that thanks to renewable
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, in the nearest future, people are able to tackle climate issues and provide the
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 generation with a safe and long lifetime.
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, alternative sources of
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 cannot assure the whole planet with
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energy
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.
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 of all, developing countries are not able to provide a vast amount of solar and wind
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, because it may cost a lot of money, so they will face problems
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 as a lack of money in their budgets.
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, renewable
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 tackle natural disasters, which can harm them and cause a lot of costs for countries,
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 they have to be developed for proper usage. To sum up, alternative sources of
energy
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 are great inventions, which can replace fossil fuels in the nearest future ,
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 it may be possible if they are adapted for each country and will not cost a lot of money for their government.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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