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Some people do same type of work for long time, while others change the type of work frequently. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some folks prefer to do a similar career for a long
time
, whereas others change their
work
 frequently. As far as I am concerned, the
first
 group have a better point due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, on the one hand, students decide to study a liked subject at the university.
Then
, they become adults and want to
work
 in their desired
job
.
Thus
, if they found their wished
job
, they will do it for a long
time
 because it was one of their hope in their childhood. For ,example a parent was asked to fill out a form about her desired
job
. Not only did she answer a lot about her career which she was doing at that moment, but she
also
 wrote some advice at the bottom of the form paper for other students of that school.
Secondly
 ,
on the other hand
, there are some folks that can't stand one
job
 and during a year,
for example
, they change their
work
 many times which for some of them may lead to tiredness and for some others may be considered as entertainment.
For instance
, research by a diligent student at the University of New South Wales in Sydney has shown that these types of workers that are in the middle of changing their careers all the
time
 may lose their passion for
work
 soon.
Finally
, working in a specific
job
, not only will help employees to have a better
job
 experience and resume, but it will
also
 lead to better
time
 management.
In addition
, they can use the rest of their
time
 not to
work
 in another
job
, but to go on vacations with their family or hang out with their friends which helps them to chill out, relax and release their stress. According to what has already been discussed in the above paragraphs, the idea of the
first
 group has a better point which was about working for a long
time
 in a particular
job
.
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