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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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As
the
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society is putting more emphasis on people’s
looking
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looks
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,some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly.
In
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contrary
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,some others value the quality of
work
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 above appearance. As far as I am concerned,the
first
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 group of people might be more solicitude for their impressions to others, especially to the clients.Those people deem the apparel a symbol of their attitude towards the business ,and officially dressed
also
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express
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 that they
are
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care
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 more
care
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 about
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cooperation,while the other group of people think making the
work
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 perfectly done can be more convincing.After all,
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a worker’s
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worker’s
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workers’
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 duty is
accomplishing
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to accomplish
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 their
work
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 carefully,
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 of putting too much attention on their own looking. Well,personally speaking, the quality of
work
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 does have its importance,but in some necessary
situation
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situations
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,the
outlooks
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outlook
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 is important as well.
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,in my father’s company,workers can wear
the
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clothes which
makes
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 them feel more comfortable,when they are going to meet the clients or have a meeting,
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,they are demanded
for
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officially
dressing
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dress
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.
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 to say,the dressing can be resilient,but formal attire is obviously needed in specific areas. In short,those two views both have their reasonableness, but in our daily lives,we should unite them reasonably to make our
works
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work
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 more efficient.
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