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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example,through cellphone tracking and security cameras) In many cases,the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening Do you think the advantage of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that day's automation in
this
 period is very important and people used self-phones everywhere. The question is, do you think phones are dangerous in human
life
? In the essay , I am going to discuss both views and advantages and disadvantages in the conclusion.
This
 nowadays the smartphones it is very important at work , and school, learning new languages even selling and
buy
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, and travelling.
To begin
, In daily
life
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 we can keep in touch with family, friends call anyone anywhere anytime, call doctors our boss in the work, call the police, it is making our
life
 easier and more fun,
In addition
 , if you want to rent a hotel in other country or ticket for air flight, train and cinema you can do it in yourself for a minute just,
However
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 we can live without internet. In terms of disadvantages,
technology
 makes people busy with the home and family and take photos of everything and post them on Snapchat, Instagram, and Facebook, they are bad hackers maybe use photos for something bad or take our information and use the card name to take your money, tracking the location in your phone you can protect yourself but you can't safely: photo,name,location,camera. In another pertinent point, there are a lot of disadvantages to
this
 new
technology
 but you can't live without it,
moreover
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 keep your personal information safe do not give it to anyone. To illustrate,
technology
 keep the far people near and the near far. In conclusion,my answer to the question is, yes it is very dangerous to learn how to use a
call up
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 and keep yourself safe.
therefore
, the advantage of the dial is good for our
life
for example
 you can watch your house from the security camera on your phone. To sum up, we could say that using
technology
 as well keeps your information and family safe.
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