We live in cities or towns which have museums displaying historical and cultural importance, but people do not visit them. What are the reasons?

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Some individuals claim that we are living in a world

that

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where

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many young people are neglecting

museums

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exhibiting historical and cultural importance.

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phenomenon results from the lack of

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citizen

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excitement and

the

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apply

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awareness of each person in maintaining the national cultural identity. After consideration,

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assume that it can be mitigated by inserting more interactive activities and advancing superior facilities in

museums

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. A primary reason why people ignore local

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is the poor insightful concept.

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, they only display permanent

artifacts

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artefacts

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, with poor light and high

temperature

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temperatures

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inside. That’s why some

museums

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appear to be not aesthetically pleasing and many visitors, including non-locals, find it predictable as the theme is repetitive. Another reason for

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issue is because of degraded facilities and poor-quality services. It implies that the money the tourists spend time on

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is not

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itworthy

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worthy

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, they feel

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is a predictable experience and lost interest

with

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things that they have already known The consequences

for

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this

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problem are serious. Resultantly, inserting more interactive activities is a necessary feature of preserving historical and cultural values. Having various activities provides the visitors

many

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knowledge,

they

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and they

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can gain

their

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apply

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insight

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through

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experience. There should be a

tour-guide

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tour guide

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to impart while visiting so the tourists can dig deeper

about

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into

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the history and culture more than just

look

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looking

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through the

artifacts

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artefacts

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, the government should upgrade quality facilities for the

museums

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to ensure the greatest experience for people. Without

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solution, there will not be anyone

visit

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visiting

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local

museums

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in the future, and the cultural identity will gradually disappear.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

261 words

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We live in cities or towns which have museums displaying historical and cultural importance, but people do not visit them. What are the reasons?

Include an introduction and conclusion

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem.

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arys and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

Some people believe that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more material and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal.