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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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More and more
people
 are taking the experience of moving to another
country
 for their studies. It is now almost considered normal. But what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing
this
? By outweighing the pros and cons we will come to a conclusion.
Firstly
, leaving
to
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 another
country
,
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 means leaving behind the family and
friends
 that you had around.
For example
, some
people
 have a hard time finding
friends
 in the
country
 they moved to and really building up a new life. In
parallel
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 your
friends
 at home continue living their lives without you.
That is
 one hard part of moving to another
country
. But on the other side, there are so many positive things
of
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 moving to another
country
: you get to know a new culture, a new language, meet many new
people
 and make international
friends
, and it is just a lifetime experience that you will never forget!
Also
, with the new
technologies
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 you can easily keep
contact
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in contact
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 with your
friends
 from home, even if it's not the same thing. It can
also
 have a very good impact on your CV, as the new language can help for the jobs you want to do later, and it just shows that you are open-minded enough to get to know a new culture. In conclusion, there is
the
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 negative part of leaving behind your life at home, but there are
also
 a lot of new things that you will get to know.
This
 is why I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. A lot of
people
 should get to do
this
 experience.
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