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In the future students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers ot TV or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

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Currently, there are more and more schools using
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home
 could be an advantage due to the
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access
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 and ease
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However
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other classmates and
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This
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instead
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instead
 at
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. As
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stay
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stay
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school
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First
 of all, you set up a daily
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routine
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 benefit because if you were at
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 or start the class from bed.
Also
, going to class the
student
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 hang out with them and play. The
student
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 face to face if he needs something
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In addition
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contact with other people helps to develop
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social
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behaviour
beahaviour
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behaviour
 and other necessary skills for life. If you were all day behind a screen you will not relate with people in real life.
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, studying at
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technoly
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, because if there are some mistakes with the internet or equipment at
home
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, there are a number of necessary aspects for personal
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development
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traditional
school
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