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Computer

Science

can help me upgrade my toolbox for

video

production and game production. I have been working in the entertainment business for almost six years. From practical use to teaching students. Gradually I think a master's degree in Fine Art is not enough. In the past, film

editors

and

video

editors

worked on equipment

such

as Moviola and

video

tape recorder systems to edit films and videotape together. Even though their jobs are not that hard and can be learned very quickly, there is a technical barrier lays between

editors

and laymen. Unfortunately, the development of

computer

technology and decreasing price of

computer

hardware destroy the barrier that lies between

editors

and the general public, anyone can become a

video

editor in less than a month. All they need to do is get a

computer

and study free tutorials or charged courses through the Internet. As an editor, I still have my advantages over those amateurs, but not that much. It’s only a matter of time before the advantages

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completely. For me, the

thing I need to do is find something that could help me to build up the barriers again, and

computer

science

is one of the

last

straws in

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negligible quantity that could put me out

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difficult situation. With the help of

computer

science

, I could shift from a postproduction software user to a postproduction software developer. I could understand the operation mechanism behind all these editing processes and animation creation, which could help me to create motion graphics, 2D 3D animation, visual effects or even

video

games from a whole different level. The film is

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combination of art and

science

, to fulfil any director’s fantasy and astonish the audience,

computer

science

is something that can be counted on. I have been exploring the aesthetic part of creating motion pictures, it’s time for me to dig deep into the technic aspects of it.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional festivals as Tet holiday; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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