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Some people think that people in senior positions alone should make decisions in a business, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, somehow
companies
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 usually emphasize that their
products
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 are new in their commercial, because they may want to attract more
customers
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. In my opinion, it is a completely positive trend in terms of extending the number of
customers
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 for those
companies
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 and triggering other
businesses
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 to produce newer and better
products
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.
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 of all, all of the organizations wish to extend their amount of
customers
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 by advertising their
products
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 and claiming that they are new. Because
customers
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 may tend to
be interest
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 in newer
products
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 than older ones.
As a result
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,
companies
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 usually use the method to increase their profit by attracting more
customers
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.
For example
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, the Apple company releases new phones every year and makes their
products
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 look
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as if they are changed too much. Despite minor changes, most people still buy new ones or change to a new phone.
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,
businesses
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 which use
this
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 method can cause other
businesses
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 to come up with better or newer
products
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. Because no organization would like to be under the shadow of others, after observing their success.
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, both or more
companies
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 would try to compete and produce
products
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 as much as quality and individuals would have more options to
be interest
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 in. To sum up, both
companies
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 and
customers
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 can take advantage of
this
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 trend, because it can help
businesses
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 to do a good job by competing with others and people would have several options of
products
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 to buy.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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