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some people believe that the extinction of animals is a natural process and human should not intervene. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays in young
families
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 both
parents
 are choosing to go to work and trying to delegate housework to different services. With
this
 tendency
not
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 working women might seem unmodern and
also
 that they don’t think about themselves and
not
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are not
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 interested in
self improvement
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.
This
 lifestyle makes partners equally important and there is no discrimination in
this
 family. Both partners are doing their own
career
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careers
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 and it brings a positive impact in the form of money.
Children
 in these families usually have many clothes and a governess but there is a lack of
parents’
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parents
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 attention. They are growing up without
parents
, going to school and making friends. They can see their
parents
 only
on
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in
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evenings
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the evenings
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 and weekends but
parents
 are usually too tired for that and need
resting
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. The
second
 positive impact is an opportunity to travel or eat in cafes because they have free money for that. In older
families
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 we can see the opposite tendency and many women are choosing to stay with their
children
 and be something like a housekeeper. There are big expectations of a working partner because his income should be enough for all family needs.
Children
 are not growing up without
parents
, they can get help with homework, ask for advice, etc. It sounds like a perfect family type, but the question is the happiness of
parents
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. Do they have an opportunity to spend time on things they love? Can they choose what they want? If there are these opportunities, in my
opinion
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 it is better than both working
parents
. I think that the perfect way is when one partner has full-time work and the
second
 has a part-time job or
just
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is just
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 a lovely
hobbie
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hobby
 for not being only in the parent’s role. Meanwhile, working parent
also
 has to be a part of
children
’s lives. Of
course
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 each family needs to buy many things for
children
 every month, but the more important thing is to be a good parent and when you can always find enough time to spend with your child, listening, talking and helping him.
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