Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. What are the advantages and disadvantages of patriotism?

Some
people
believe that
patriotism
can lead to some problems,
although
other
people
think it has some advantages for society.
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essay will examine
advantages
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and disadvantages of being patriotic
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advantage of being patriotic is that you always be ready for protecting your country. Humans who are patriotic can fight for their homeland anytime.
Therefore
,
this
has some benefits for some governments which have conflicts on borders.
In addition
, as these
people
love their homeland much, they will save
culture
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of their countries.
Thus
,
people
always have knowledge about
history
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, culture and traditions of their homelands.
However
, there are a number of disadvantages
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patriotism
.
First
of all, it can cause racism, because
people
always will be certain distances
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other nationalities. As
tourism
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the tourism
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industry is one of the main income for governments in our century, that situation is not good. So, it will reduce income in
tourism
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industry.
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disadvantage is that patriotic humans can be more dangerous than other
people
. And it can lead to some problems in society.
For example
, according to research in some countries,
which
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people
are
patriot
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crime rates are more than
other
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in other
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ones. In conclusion,
patriotism
can be some advantages
such
as braveness and helping armies to defend
homeland
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their homeland
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,
however
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it has various disadvantages.
Although
it can be not correct to be patriotic according to some
people
,
i
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believe that
patriotism
is necessary for society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • strengthening societal bonds
  • instills
  • pride and loyalty
  • excessive
  • nationalism
  • intolerance
  • discrimination
  • conflict
  • blind allegiance
  • flawed policies
  • unifying force
  • crisis
  • manipulated
  • political leaders
  • division
  • advocating
  • responsibility
  • civic duty
  • engaged
  • informed citizenship
  • balanced and inclusive
  • cultural diversity
  • marginalize
  • minority groups
  • stifle dissent
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