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International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree or disagree? Support your opinion with relevant examples

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the graphs give information about some trends in tourism to and from the United Kingdom by
residents
 and tourists from other countries between 1982 to 2002 in the
first
 graph, the number of
UK
residents
 and visitors from other countries
are
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 increasing significantly
however
UK
residents
 increased much higher than other country visitors.
On the other hand
,
second
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 graph compares
average
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the average
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 length of stay during visits to and from
UK
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the UK
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. According to
graph
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the graph
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UK
residents
 spend more time
in
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 their vacation. And
this
 trend decreasing significantly since 1982. In conclusion, the trend of
residents
 and overseas visitors are almost similar but
UK
 resident’s vacation length and interest are higher than overseas tourists
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