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A second language is regarded as essential to success in the modern world. It should be compulsory for all children to study a second language as soon as they start school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is often argue
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 that studying a foreign
language
 in preschool and primary school should be obligatory or not. I strongly agree with
this
 statement because learning a
second
language
 at that age is a major role not only
for
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 self-improvement but
also
for
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 learning more quickly than other ages for the following reasons as follow. One thing
that is
 of great significance is that it is necessary to be able to read, write, speak and listen in a different
language
 from our mother
language
 in order to
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 in
modern
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the modern
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 world. An example of
this
 can be best provided by
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a meet
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meet
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 and
learn
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learning
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 the different cultures and
adopt
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a
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 present time easily. Another special consideration, in
this
 case, is that being bilingual is so crucial to adopt
new
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 modern world and technology in
youth
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the youth
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 generation.
In addition
, in comparison
for
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 adults or
elder
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the elder
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 generation, all children
more
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are more
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 curious and enthusiastic
in
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about
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 new skills,
such
 as speaking another
language
. A young student who started studying
second
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a second
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language
at
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in
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 the early year of school has
higher
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 chance to show speaking fluently and freely in that
language
 during adulthood than someone who started
language
 studies in secondary school.
For instance
, my sister learned
German
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language
from
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the
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apply
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kindergarten and now she is able to use
as
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it as
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 his native. In conclusion, especially, learning and studying
new
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a new
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 different
language
 from
mother
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the mother
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 tongue at the youth
ages
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age
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 is essential to understand how
modern
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the modern
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 world changes and
develop
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develops
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.
Moreover
, you can learn it as
quick
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 as possible at those ages.
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