You exercise regularly and have been a member of many different gyms. Recently, you moved into a new neighbourhood and joined a new gym. You have noticed that people at this gym do not bother to wipe down the machines after use and often leave dirty towels on the benches in the changing rooms. Write to the gym manager. In your letter: Explain who you are Describe the problem exactly Make suggestions to improve the gym

Dear Mr Sam, I am Sarah Hubert, an accountant by profession. I have recently moved into
this
vicinity and joined your
gym
. So far, I have liked
much
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everything about your
gym
; including enough
spaces
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between the machines,
friendly
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a friendly
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environment especially since I really like talking to people, proper air conditioning and
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training plan for each person.
However
, when it comes to maintaining hygiene, I am a bit disappointed with it. The
gym
could use some improvements, like what I see is that most people, visiting your
gym
, do not even bother to wipe down the machines after using them.
Moreover
, some of them leave dirty towels often on the benches and on the floor in the changing rooms. So, in my point of view, concerning
this
hygiene issue, I would like to suggest you
to
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provide a hygiene guideline for all those visiting your
gym
. The
gym
staff should
also
be more active and take the initiative to clean the
gym
and its equipment regularly. Thanks for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Sarah Hubert
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