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In some cites and towns all over the world ,the high volume of traffic is a problem.what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Travel congestion is a serious issue for urban metropolises around the World.
This
 essay will explain how overconsumption of roads and poor conditions of public transportation can cause the problem and find possible ideas to tackle them. Nowadays wild range number of
people
 are having their own private car due to it has become more affordable for average consumers and they are no longer
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item
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. The
first
 step is to understand why
traffic
 has increased in towns and
cities
. Broadly speaking, there are three main reasons for
this
. One is that cars have become more affordable for the average
consumers
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 and they are no longer a luxury item, but something that most families expect to own. A
second
 reason is that public transport has become increasingly unreliable in recent years, not least because many bus and train services have been reduced because of the difficulty in funding them. The
third
 reason is that society has, in general, become more mobile and
this
 means more
people
 are prepared to commute to work by car than they were before. The biggest
causes
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 of
traffic
 jam lack of proper
road
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 and bridges in
cities
. If there is an additional way for buses and large trucks in
cities
,
traffic
 jams reduce in
cities
. There is almost certainly no one solution to
this
 problem given the complexity of its causes.
However
, one option has to be to improve the reliability of public transport to encourage
people
 to take the bus or the train rather than get in the car. It would
also
 be possible to discourage
people
 from driving to work by introducing special tariffs for using the roads, especially during peak periods. In conclusion, there are a variety of different factors that have led to rising levels of
traffic
 in urban areas. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution but actions should probably involve encouraging more use of public
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